Monday, December 17, 2007

Salmon Story

Salmon Story



One foggy fall morning four young salmon set off for there spawning. Their names were Joey, the leader of the group. He is the smartest and his father is the mayor of Homeroom. A small fish town outside of Salmonville. Pete is the strongest and fastest of the group and is the son of the Protector. Megan is the prettiest girl in the town and is Joey's girlfriend. Megan is also the daughter of the richest fish in town. Lizzy is Megan's best friend and the second prettiest girl in town. Lizzy is Pete's girlfriend and her father is the mayor's advisor. They were the closest of friends. As they set off to the river mouth they said good by to their other friends and family for what could be the last time.
Joey, the leader of the group decided they would head up the Columbia river. What they didn't know is that was the river with the most danger in it. So off they went to a land they have never been to and possibly will never see again. As they were leaving they had to pass through the customs check at the mouth of the river to make sure they weren't taking any bad things up river. After that they were on their way heading up stream when they met a young trout named Sammy. He would be there guide up the river so they wouldn't get lost.
Mean while farther up river a plot to stop the salmon run was being planned out by The Board Of Bears And Other Mean Animals That Want To Eat Salmon. They made a plan to catch the salmon as they tried to jump the falls. Little did they know that Sammy was going to take Joey and the gang a different route away from the falls so they wouldn't get hurt or even worse, killed. So while swimming Joey and sammy were talking about what route they were going to take. Then out of the blue sky an eagle swooped down and grabbed one of the other salmon swimming with the group. Off it took and that created a mass scramble which was dangerous for the group. People might run into each other and knock each other out and then be easy catch for any one who wants them.
So the group split from the mass group and took off up a side stream. So there they were on some stream they had no idea about. But then out of no where a little frog named Hoppy Hoppington said he could show them the way back to the river. So off they went following the pretty strange frog who was a little to old to be junping around the way he did. As they were swimming up stream a bear came out of the woods and attacked the group. In the mist of all the action Lizzy got bit by the bear and was bleeding very badly.
Pete was freaking out and punching rocks and logs that were close to him. Joey, Sammy, Megan, and Hoppy were standing back letting him vent because they didn't want to get hurt. While Pete was in his rage Lizzy whispered something to him and he just stopped everything he was doing and kneeled down next to her. They talked for about a minute and then she went limp. Pete had a single tear in his eye that he wiped away. So off they went up stream the rest off the way to the river. No one said a word it was silent. At the river mouth they said thank you to Hoppy and set off back on the columbia.
Joey was leading the group while the rest followed and Joey called Pete up to the front to talk for a second. He asked Pete, “Are you ok man? How are you doin?”
Pete said, “I'm ok just a little Shook up.”
Joey replied with a serious tone, “Good. We need our guard up for the rest of the trip. This isn't gonna be easy.”
Pete said “Yeah. I got it. Ill be fine.”
Joey said, “If your sure man, let's head out.”
So they started swimming again and after 3 days of swimming non-stop they came to the falls that the bears were at. They had to jump them. There was no other way.
So for 7 days they sat jumping and trying to get past the bears. Finally Joey made it. He was up then Megan took her jump. She almost made it but Pete could see a bear going right for Megan so he jumped right at the bear and knocked the bears teeth out. The bear fell off the falls into the water and Megan made it up. Now its Pete's turn. He jumped and what a jump it was. The highest jump in salmon history right over a bear and splash he was in home free. But there was one problem, he had to find a new mate. Then at the mating grounds Pete found his girl, and boy was she pretty. her name was Sandy.
So there they were Joey, Megan, Pete, and Sandy. They all had a good mating season both couples had a full batch of little ones all healthy and strong and Pete became famous for his jump over the bear.

1 comment:

Fresh Start @ The IKE Box said...

Cody,
I read your story... I think it is has some very creative elements that make it fun to read and unique. I like how you incorporate human elements in the story to bring out human connections.

You do have a few typographical errors... something that we could have caught in class. The other component missing from your story is a link to the real life cycle of the salmon. You do not really mention much of it at all.

By fixing these things you would have met full expectations. I do encourage you to make the necessary changes. Please see me if you have questions.